My Common App essay would enjoy a little critiquing

<p>Would anyone be willing to critique my common app essay? I can PM it to you.
Thank you!</p>

<p>ya, sure! 10char</p>

<p>If you still need someone to take a look, feel free to PM it to me.</p>

<p>I’ll read it.</p>

<p>I can look at it</p>