<p>I'd really like some readers to look over my essay as a whole and give me their honest impressions. </p>
<p>If anyone is really up for a challenge, I'd appreciate some help/ideas to fix up my conclusion. Right now I feel it kind of drags on and is a tad preachy. </p>
<p>So... if your willing to read and give suggestions please PM me or post below. If you think you can help out with the conclusion as well, that would be amazing.</p>