<p>Well, as I see it that is investing a lot of words to reveal that you don’t like to work in a cubicle. It doesn’t reveal anything more about you–about what makes you you.</p>
<p>Aim for something that only you could write. Here, check out this good advice:</p>
<p>[Essays</a>, Admission Information, Undergraduate Admission, U.Va.](<a href=“http://www.virginia.edu/undergradadmission/writingtheessay.html]Essays”>http://www.virginia.edu/undergradadmission/writingtheessay.html)</p>