My essay for Cornell, critique please?

College Essays
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<p>I have just finished my version 1.0 of this essay and I know it's pretty late. Does anybody have interest in taking a look?Plus, it is the first time I am here and I am not live in the U.S.</p>

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<p>ill edit it. pm it to me</p>

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<p>i’ll take a look at it im taking a break from essays right now</p>

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<p>I’ll read it</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look. Not applying there but I’m bored so why not?</p>

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<p>i could take a look. pm me</p>

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<p>i’ll take a look, i’m pretty good with editing.</p>

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<p>ill definately read it for you</p>

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<p>I’ll have a look if you want</p>

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<p>I’ll read it. PM me.</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look at it.</p>

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<p>i’ll take a look at it also. pm it</p>