My first complete try at an admissions essay...

<p>The diversity prompt from the Common App. Kinda nervous about sharing essays online, but I would really like constructive criticism. :-) PM me if you're interested, or e-mail (<a href="mailto:babsie452@yahoo.com">babsie452@yahoo.com</a>) if you prefer, thanks!</p>

<p>I would like to read it over if you like, just PM me.</p>

<p>me too! I hope I can help you. PM me if you want my opinion</p>

<p>I can try to give some input on your essay, if you want.</p>

<p>anyone else? i would especially like input on whether or not my essay even fits the prompt, a concern of mine from the beginning. :-)</p>

<p>I can read the essay for you. PM me! :)</p>

<p>I'll read your essay...PM it to me! :>)</p>

<p>I'll read it. PM or email (<a href="mailto:coldrising@gmail.com">coldrising@gmail.com</a>)</p>

<p>I'll check it out.</p>

<p>PM it to me.</p>

<p>ok i suppose. pm it to me</p>

<p>Sure, I'll read it, too!</p>

<p>ill read it, pm me</p>

<p>oh wow. sorry i haven't been checking this board! i will send them along now. :-)</p>

<p>yeah sure!
email it to <a href="mailto:lizzy4life@gmail.com">lizzy4life@gmail.com</a></p>

<p>PM and I'll give you some advice, if I can. But we're all amateurs here!</p>

<p>hey I can give u my opinion and some insight. PM
(I'm attending Duke this fall so no fear of plagiarism =D)</p>

<p>i'll read it, email it</p>

<p>Send it to me. I'll give it a look. <a href="mailto:eboverli@gmail.com">eboverli@gmail.com</a></p>

<p>i'll read it, send it over</p>