My first essay!

<p>im about to be a senior this coming school year but anyways i applied for the questbridge scholarship in april which required an essay - a common thing for scholarships. consequently, it was my first essay for any kind of application and i was wondering if anyone could read it to see what i need to improve upon so i can prepare for future scholarship and college applications. thanks in advance</p>

<p>bump...can anyone please revise my essay just put your email and ill send it. i would greatly appreciate it.</p>

<p>PM me if you wish an opinion.</p>

<p>pm me ....</p>

<p>PM me if you want a critique. Keep in mind that I'm very honest, which may or may not be to your benefit.</p>

<p>pm me...i'll give it a shot</p>

<p>PM me and i'll give you my opinion</p>

<p>PM me and i'll give my advice</p>

<p>email or Pm me, i will give some comments. Thanks.
<a href="mailto:Yi.yixingdsy@gmail.com">Yi.yixingdsy@gmail.com</a></p>

<p>i'll read it, <a href="mailto:aband08@germantownacademy.org">aband08@germantownacademy.org</a></p>