My last chance: tackling the transfer essay

Transfer Students
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<p>Hi all, </p>

<p>I am applying to over 8 transfer schools, all public, save for USC. I created an essay which would fit all of them, I'll add in some specifics tailored to each on at the end but was wondering if any one would <em>please</em> critique mine or let me know any problems seen?</p>

<p>I am not taking any english classes, and as an international student, I have no one else to ask (my parents don't speak english, either!)</p>

<p>Any help would be appreciated! Thank you</p>

<p>Miranda</p>

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<p>I've been hitting a lot of essays recently, and once I send mine out, I'll have sometime to read yours. </p>

<p>PM me with them if you want.</p>

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<p>you may send yours to me as well...</p>

<p>Cvjn, have you looked at my reply?</p>

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<p>I'm bored so I'll have a loot at it if you still need. Just pm it to me, and I'll get it back to you asap.</p>

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<p>you can send it to me</p>