My personal narrative..any readers?

Applying to College
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<p>I'm on the final draft of my personal narrative, that I will use as my writing peice for the common app. I would love to have some people that dont know me as a person read it. its only about 500 words and it would be very appriciated if some people could read it and let me know what they think, and what it tells about me, because I am afraid its kind of hidden. Let me know and I will PM it to u. Thanks!</p>

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<p>i don't know you so yeah i'll give it a shot</p>

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<p>i'll comment =)</p>

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<p>pm me i'll comment</p>

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<p>pm me............</p>

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<p>ill rea d it:)</p>

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<p>anyone else? i think it lacks focus, anyone who is good at that, i would really appriciate it!</p>

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<p>PM i'll read and give some feedback</p>

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<p>PM me..im a good reader</p>

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<p>pm me ill critique it for ya</p>

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<p>I'll read it...</p>