<p>Can anyone read my essay and give some feedbacks?
I am studying at a community college now and want to transfer to UCB/USD/UCLA/UCSD for Fall 07. I struggled for a long time just to start the essay because i never wrote something like that before. Yesterday I wrote something finally. I wrote about 200 words for each question because i can't decide where i should write the 600 words part. Can someone read my essay and give me some idea to write and improve please?</p>
<p>Thx........</p>