My Unique JHU Essay; Critical Readers are Appreciated

<p>Hey I just wrote my first college essay (rough draft?), and I wanted to send it to JHU. I'm also a National Merit Semifinalist, and was considering whether or not to send this as my essay for my Finalist Application. I really would appreciate some constructive criticism since this is my first draft, and i would like to know where to go from here. I'll PM u, thanks!</p>

<p>PM it to me … I’ll take a look at it and critique it!</p>

<p>I’ll give it a read =)</p>

<p>I would love to read it!</p>

<p>i’ll read it! i’m a 2014’er, but i’m not applying to JHU if that’s any consolation.</p>

<p>i’d love to read it, ill offer some advice if i can</p>