<p>i would love for you to look at mine… can i email it to you, cuz i don’t quite have the 15 post requirement yet</p>
<p>Guys, she is really the bees knees. Fixed my essay up part by part, it sounds so much better now :)</p>
<p>Sent you a PM. Thanks in advance for any critiques!</p>
<p>is there another way I can send you my UC personal statement rough draft because i need at least 15 posts to PM</p>
<p>I sent u a PM, did u get it?</p>
<p>Thanks again!</p>
<p>glad to hear that @yalesoon , I sent mine in a few days ago and hadn’t heard a response, I’m sure she is pretty busy.</p>
<p>Mystery Diagnosis
Last Sunday of February, ad I awoke to a gnawing but subtle pain in my stomach, which I disregarded as I carried on with my usual Sunday routine. By the end of the day, the pain had intensified and I partially hoped and believed it was constipation. 11pm, Im barely able to sleep for more than an hour, who needs sleep, and the pains amplified to the point where I couldnt sit still which left me writhing around on my bed; my family would not have been able to afford a visit to the emergency room, so I bore the pain in silence. This marked the beginning of one the worst period of my life.</p>
<p>The excruciating pain in my stomach continued on relentlessly till the next wedens, and it left me incapable of properly functioning through the day, as I crawled through the hallways to the classes the nurse forced me to attend and spent most of my time in the nurses office with the sole opportunity of relief: a heating pad; the sleepless and painful nights spend soaked in hot water dreaded on. School became a misery, residing at home was a misery, life was utterly and completely wretched. I had reached the epitome of my endurance. </p>
<p>I finally realized that time would not transpire healing, and that I desperately needed to visit the doctor or I would eventually drop dead. By the date for my first hospital appointment, I had already become accustomed to the agonizing pain in my stomach, and felt as though my stomach had always been in ceaseless agony so when I was asked the level of pain by the doctor, I weakly replied, 6/10. We went through the usual the routine examination with extra prodding. I dreadfully went home with the false hope and thought that my pain was digressing, unfortunately, I was dead wrong. </p>
<p>At this point, I had lost all hope in my doctors, and began to attempt to self diagnose and heal myself with natural products. I pinpointed the area of my abdomen where the pain was most prevalent researched the many diseases that could cause pain, however nothing seemed to fit! For the first time in my life, google and its many resources did not have the answer. I made and drank concoctions of herbs, that I believed would heal me but none of them worked instantaneously so I was left to suffer once more. I had never felt this type of vicious and relentless pain in my life and It needed to stop. Yet another hospital visit for an X-Ray, which repeatedly produced no indication of a constant twister in my body. </p>
<p>As I sat in my seat squeezing my stomach and swaying back and forth, I observed the nurses and doctors swiftly moving to and fro, and at that precise moment of awe, inspite of the maelstrom of agony, I yearned so much to stand up, demand for my lab coat and join them. </p>
<p>This is it, I thought. This is the defining moment in my life I had been awaiting, the assurance that the choice and path Ive chosen to become a Medical Doctor and to aspire to change the world through medicine is a definite part of my life. Hustling and bustling to cure diseases, and save lives, what I am meant to do for the rest of my life.</p>
<p>I continued to suffer through the pain after another failed hospital visit. Finally, I was so drained psychologically, that I broke down , got on my knees and prayed till I bled. I awoke the next morning to virtually no pain and rested. This agonizing experience has significantly encouraged me to ensure that absolutely nobody has to endure as much pain as I did no medical explanation.</p>
<p>Hi, Dixie, dropped you a pm!</p>
<p>Dixie, your inbox is full! Any way to contact you? I emailed you!</p>
<p>Can you correct my Stanford supplement essay? It’s rather short (250 words). Let me know; I’m doing REA.
Thanks!</p>
<p>Dixie, your inbox is full, and I did what RMiSLJ did - I emailed you. I’m REA. THANK YOU SO MUCH, you’re a lifesaver. <3</p>
<p>hey dixie, i finally sent u my updated version of essay. coz ur msg box is full so i emailed u. hv u received it? many thanks! :)</p>
<p>Do you have time to read mine?</p>
<p>Could you read my common app essay as well as a chicago supplement?</p>
<p>Can you critique mine? It says your PM is at its max. Thanks!</p>
<p>Wow! So many submissions. Don’t even think it is worth it to submit mine. Good luck to those applying</p>
<p>Wish I would’ve seen this thread earlier!</p>
<p>Describe the world you come from for example, your family, community or school
and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. </p>
<p>School teachers, friends, and family members, all have had a huge influence in shaping my dreams and aspirations. Still, I think the most enjoyable and educating part of my life was participation in various entrepreneurship, startup events and hackathons. All of which helped to define me and focus the direction of my future studies. </p>
<p>However, factors such as distance from home and being alone in a new place scared me from taking the steps needed to make my dream come true. All of that changed in 2012 when I heard a speech by Gigi Wang a Board Member at MIT/Stanford Venture Lab at Silicon Valley Comes to the Baltics conference.</p>
<p>In her speech, Wang discussed the importance of sharing ideas between businesses and establishing your own companies. She noted that to be successful, people have to leave their comfort zones and do something they are not used to doing. Wang said that when she had been younger she had asked her mentor what she needed to do to grow in her career, he replied “You need to get out of your comfort zone.” It was then I realized, traveling to new places, meeting new people and experiencing new things is a great way to push your life beyond the limits.</p>
<p>Those words inspired me to prepare for my SAT exams, to take them and apply to the University of California. Although the distance between Vilnius and San Francisco is just under six thousand miles, I am more excited about the opportunities ahead rather than the distance in between. I have realised that I must overcome the difficulties and try to reach my goal - education in the United States. Conferences like Silicon Valley Comes to Baltics proved to me that if you want, everything is possible. I have realised that my dreams which I thought are unrealistic one day may actually come true. </p>
<p>If not for the many entrepreneurship, startups events, hackathons and the people who I met along the way, I would not be who I am today. Now I know that every time I face difficulties in my life I must overcome them and try to reach my goal, which today is an education in the United States.</p>