need common app personal essay critique!!!

<p>A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you. </p>

<p>that is the prompt. Would anyone be willing to help me. The schools I am looking at are Cornell, Duke, Stanford, WashU and Vanderbilt. I plan on majoring in science or engineering</p>