Need feedback?

I already sent an essay in that I wrote, proofread, and had my mom proofread and approve. The thing is that I tried to go for “likeable” and now I feel that my essay is too silly or not understandable. Can someone just read it and let me know how you feel? I guess I can’t do anything about it now, but still some feedback would be nice I guess

I wouldn’t mind reading your essay and also offering a second opinion. I would also recommend having an english teacher read it over for any advice/grammatical errors

With all due respect to the previous poster-- who has offered some great advice on other threads— please don’t send your essay to anyone who isn’t an adult with a proven posting history.

@bjkmom thanks for the advice but I wasn’t planning on sending it to other kids