Need help on Princeton essay!

<p>Its like my eighth draft and I still cant get my essay to work. i talk about philosophy a bit so i'm afraid that my essay isn't personal enough. Can someone read it and let me know what you think? Thanks!</p>

<p>Sure. I sent mine out last night. I talked about philosophy, too, so I might be of some help.</p>

<p>I'll read tonight..
I will warn you though, I am quite harsh.</p>