Need help proofreading UC essay!

Applying to College
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<p>Can anyone proofread my UC essay. This is for my open ended. All constructive criticisms welcome!!! :)</p>

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<p>i'll read it</p>

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<p>i'll read it too</p>

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<p>I'll read it too, PM me.</p>

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<p>ill proof read it. just PM me.</p>