need help revising NYU SHORT ANSWERS!

College Essays
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<p>pleasepleasepleaseplease</p>

<p>If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do? (Your New Yorker can be anyone -past or present, fictional or nonfictional - who is commonly associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York.)</p>

<pre><code>Perusing through New YorkCity with Adam Sandler would definitely be an experience. We would ignore the classy restaurants in favor of the risqu
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<p>Very creative. Nice writing style.</p>

<p>A few comments: For #1: “Perusing through” sounds wierd. “Touring” might be better. For the movie: I think the adcoms are interested in hearing you talk about your life–either as it is or as you hope it will be. Presumably this storyline is fiction? Perhaps a story about music and what it has brought you and gotten you through would be more illuminating.</p>