Need help shortening/brutal criticism

College Essays
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<p>Does anyone who's not going to be applying this year want to read my common app essay? </p>

<p>Also, if the topic itself doesn't seem to gel well then tell me so. I have a couple back ups in mind. </p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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<p>i’ll read it, i will tell you exactly what i think of it, no matter how brutal (and i already applied to college last year, so no worries)</p>

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<p>thank you!</p>

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<p>Send me if you like Ill try to be as harsh as I can:P</p>

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<p>haha thank you :D</p>

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<p>Send it over.</p>

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<p>ill read it
but im a 2014er</p>

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<p>hold up guys, making a bunch of changes. i’ll give an update when it’s finished</p>

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<p>ok, i read it, but I will definitely wait for the update before I get carried away</p>

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<p>anyone up for take two?</p>

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<p>hit me up I will take a look and give you a feedback</p>

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<p>All right your inbox in full so I will just post my reply here.</p>

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<p>Any questions just post here/PM me.</p>

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<p>PM it over!</p>

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<p>ah thanks DSI, I’m fixing this one up the best I can and then trying out another idea which is definitely more “my style” but the topic itself may not be as cohesive with my application. I’ll end up choosing between the two in the summer, something I’d love to have your help with :)</p>

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<p>More than happy to help. Just remember to include the prompt. (People really need to start doing that haha.)</p>

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<p>oh, these are just common app essays. no prompt. </p>

<p>anyway, what are some opinions on the use of humor in an essay? Mine’s pretty funny… but sometimes it seems a little cutesy. I’m afraid that they won’t take me seriously.</p>

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<p>alright, it’s revised. anyone want to read?</p>

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<p>I have another essay. Does anyone have some time to help out?</p>