I wanted to get some more input for my transfer essay. I really want this to work out and accept any criticism! Thank you!!
PROMPT: Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.
I remember distinctly the first time I was exposed to how writing, and specifically my own words on paper, could compel another person to feel emotion. How they understood what I was feeling and thinking, simply by the words I wrote. I was in eighth grade and my English teacher was giving me praise for a paper I had written on my parents’ divorce. For the first time, writing wasn’t about getting an “A” or following a five paragraph system; we had been given minimal guidelines for the paper and I’d thrived. As my teacher, Ms. Palmer, had put it I understood how to “present a factual story while keeping the reader’s’ interest.” She suggested that I submit it to a special essay contest and I was thrilled. I gained so much that day, more than just another “A” on an assignment, but an appreciation for my newfound talent.
From that moment on, I began writing whatever I was feeling at any given moment and about what I saw happening in the world around me. Whether it was my frustrations about the never-ending conflicts in society or my personal dilemmas on being a modern day teenager, I can guarantee I wrote about it. Even at my young age, I started to rack my brain trying to ascertain how I could be sure to use writing in my career. Should I be a novelist, a poet, maybe even a screenwriter? All of these different ideas came and went during my phase of pondering. Once I hit high school though, it all became clear to me; how I could help others through my writing. It came to me because of what Ms. Palmer had said; I could make the pain and tribulations of everyday life less difficult, even if just for the small amount of time while someone was reading what I presented to the world. I determined I would be a journalist. I aspire for my writing to make an impact on society, and aid people through the adventure of life. Whether it’s an investigative news article, editorial piece, or even a feature about an esteemable individual, I am eager to learn more about honing in on my abilities for writing. I have utilized the resources placed around me and learned much along the way. Although I am very grateful for what I have learned while being at College of the Canyons, it is not where my path ends. I had the opportunity to try out different courses and determine what was best for me. Most importantly, though I was able to work on my writing and solidify what I want to do. Transferring to a prestigious university in a thriving, scholastic environment is the next step in my journey and I am more than prepared to take it. Exercising the expertise I gain from the wonderful experience of attending a university, I will be able to go forth in the world and do what I’ve always dreamt of; make my mark on society in the most fitting way that I know how.