Need input from other readers on my common app essay...please?

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<p>I've just written a very rough draft of a new common app essay (I've been through many now) and I wanted to see if the comedic tone of the essay worked out as well as if the conclusion is a strong enough one.</p>

<p>Any comments would be awesome.</p>

<p>Is there anyone that I can email/PM my essay to?</p>

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<p>bump10char</p>

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<p>PM it to me I can read, edit, critique. im class 09 but will not steal your essay and prolly not applying to same schools anyway :D</p>

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<p>its sent. 10 char</p>