Need readers/opinions/editors for Yale Essay! Please help :) Urgent :(

<p>Hi thank you so much for your time,</p>

<p>I was hoping I could have a parent or current college student read over and give me some pointers.</p>

<p>Thank you in advance. </p>

<p>Sure, I’ll take a look. </p>

<p>Pass it on…i’m listening to the World Series and will read it between innings. </p>

<p>I can help</p>