Need Some Help on My Common App Essay Please!!!

<p>Hey everyone,
Trying to find the right approach to my common app essay. Please be harsh! hahaha
Also, I would prefer if you are a college student or if you have had experience reading these essays before! Thank you :)</p>

<p>pm me if you will. thanks.</p>

<p>pm me too ill read it</p>

<p>Thank you!</p>

<p>bump…would like more people for feedback please!</p>

<p>I’ll read them</p>

<p>I’d be glad to give you my opinion ;)</p>