<p>So I wrote up my essay and showed it to two of my teachers and asked for their opinions. The essay prompt was "Describe a setback or ethical dilemma that you have faced. How did you resolve it? How did the outcome affect you? If something similari happened in the future, how woudl you react?" One teacher read my essay and told me she thoguht it was pretty good. On the other hand, my other teacher told me she thought my topic was a little too common even though it was not a bad essay, but it wasn't anything amazing either. Basically in my essay I talk about tennis, and how i was losing a match really bad so i basically gave up, then i got lucky and won one game, then ended up winning a set after i started trying, and almost ended up winning. so i realized that if I had kept trying even after he hit like a ton of good shots in a row during the first set, taking a big lead i should never give up. lesson: don't give up</p>
<p>So my question is...should I take a couple extra days and write a new essay (i'm thinking about a topic about how I grew up with a twin and always had to live in his shadow etc. etc., so it'd be unique), or should I just edit my current essay and turn it in sooner?</p>
<p>I think the tennis one sounds very generic and uninteresting. Unless it is very witty or stylistically written, I doubt that it will be unique enough to impress the reader. I say go with a different topic. If you are going to write about your twin and living in his shadow (which probably should be pretty original), I'd advise against sounding so negative (I'm just assuming that it may not be such a positive essay since the way you wrote "live in his shadow" sounded as if you were bitter about it). </p>
<p>Yes, I agree. Word choice is important in writing. I would write about something that has changed me dramatically. For example:
I was picked on a lot when I was younger and I didn't have any friends for about eight years. It was pretty bad. I'd be physically sick before going to school and I didn't have any friends for a long time. But now I feel like a lot of good came out of it. My hardship helped me learn about an important life skill: forgiveness. Now I really appreciate the friends I have now and I realize that even though people can seem absolutely cruel and sadistic, they have an enormous capacity for love and kindness.
Just take care to highlight the GOOD that came out of your dilemma.<br>
Hope this helps!</p>