need some quick feedback! plzzzz reply this time

College Essays
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<p>Plz review my idea for the 150 words question.</p>

<p>I'm going to talk about piano as something that built my confidence over the years, because when I first came to the US, playing hit music in the piano by ear was the easiest way to make friends for me; and now because of my music ability, I have a chance to be a leader in my church's praise team and it has become a part of my life..... is that good lol? </p>

<p>also, should I write about a comp sci related activity if I wanna major in comp sci? </p>

<p>thx thx thx</p>

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<p>hmmm… sounds inspiring but generic… just make it uber-personal.</p>

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<p>I think its a bit cliche but if you do it definately concentrate on the personal side not the EC side. Talk about the making friends part.</p>