Need someone to read a rough first draft

I’m not 100% sure if I’m really on the right track with this idea. I wrote this in about an hour and a half, for some context. This is for the common app personal statement, but I don’t believe my response falls under any of the given prompts, such as it stands right now. I’d really appreciate it if anyone could give it a once over. Thanks.

PM it to me. Tell me which prompt(s) you think it might come closest to.