Need tons of criticism on my essay

<p>If anybody here is willing to read my draft of my essay (It's technically for English class, but the purpose is to use it for a college essay, I'm just not sure what one I will use it for yet). I really want a lot of opinions on it to make it better so please let me know if you will read it!</p>

<p>pm it to me</p>

<p>Thanks a lot! I pmed it</p>