Nervous about this essay! Please help!

<p>Hey guys. i was really hoping that i can get some of your reviews on my college essay (common app). I wrote it and reviewed it several times. I know i need to condense it, but besides that, i would like reviews as harsh as you can make it. THANKS ALOT!</p>

<p>If you would be so kind as to review it, please respond with how you would like me to get you my essay (ex: email...?) thanks alot!</p>

<p>I can. Just PM it over</p>

<p>did you get my messages?</p>