Nice essay, but too simple? Help please!

<p>I wrote an essay for a scholarship, but should I send it to my colleges as well???
PM me if you'd like to critique and offer any suggestions. Preferably not '08 ers (No offense, I know you guys have great insight too :-))</p>

<p>Bump. Read it pretty please? Everyone who has read it said it was GREAT, but Im not sure if its enough</p>

<p>I'm an 08er (didn't know we were called that haha), but if you can't find anyone i'm available =]</p>

<p>sure ill read it</p>

<p>thanks! I've sent it. Any more readers?</p>

<p>well i'm a 08er but i will read it if you can't find anyone else =)</p>

<p>just pm me =)</p>

<p>My last bump</p>