Northwestern university supplement (urgent only few hours left )

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<p>i m an international student applying for northwestern university (only few hours left please help me )
can you please find grammatical errors and give opinions about the whole essay or mention the part you find best in this article</p>

<p>Northwestern Statement: What are the unique qualities of Northwestern - and of the specific undergraduate school to which you are applying - that make you want to attend the University? In what ways do you hope to take advantage of the qualities you have identified? (250 words)</p>

<p>As a student inspired by Mahatma Gandhi I always believed that practice is worth more than tons of preaching. And after watching the list of classroom activities and practical knowledge offered here, I am very positive that Northwestern University is the ideal college for me.
As long as I remember I have found fancy science labs extremely appealing, Thanks to Google I found about different kinds of labs and found Robert R. McCormick School of Engineering and Applied Science have got all of them. One of the luxuries that McCormick provides is their Ford Motor Company Engineering Design Center, for me it is as feeling heaven, without even dying! as they provide a collaborative environment and have facilities of research rooms and project display areas that open endless opportunities.
NU’s engineering program hulks very deep in my head, because I have many dreams about my engineering career in which I make machines more intelligent and more advanced and I believe Northwestern will help me achieve those dreams with their challenging work and world acclaimed teachers.<br>
One of the best things I found is that research programs are one of your top priorities and have budgets of 1.5 billion annually, and also offers summer research programs for undergraduates, I always loved working in groups and solve problems that interest me and may change millions of lives.</p>

<p>I appreciate you taking the time to accommodate me</p>

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<p>The introduction is weak and irrelevant. Sounds like you had to choose between Northwestern(a college where you “practice”) and a religious school or a monastery(a place where you “preach”).</p>

<p>Overall, the essay is deficient and poorly written. Phrases such as “for me it is as feeling heaven, without even dying” shed great doubt on your ability to handle the curriculum at Northwestern. I’d say such an essay is a sure way to get a rejection. Don’t send it.</p>

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<p>I second that. Some aspects of the essay sound way too cliche.</p>