Ok, my 2nd attempt at a college app essay... anyone willing?

Applying to College
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<p>My first one was shot down by many unbiased people, so I came up with a new idea for my essay. I need some feedback on the content of it not the grammar stuff.... anyone wanna do it?</p>

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<p>You can PM me.</p>

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<p>ill give it a shot too.</p>

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<p>pm me ill read it!</p>

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<p>sure pm me :)</p>

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<p>PM me also</p>

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<p>pm me i'll give a look :)</p>

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<p>I'll read it, PM me....</p>

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<p>pm me i'll give a look</p>

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<p>yea pm me anytime</p>

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<p>ill read it!</p>

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<p>ill read it, thx</p>