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<p>Hi all! I just finished my first SAT essay. Could I get some feedback, please? Thanks. (Typed as written)</p>

<p>Assignment:
Is it important to question the ideas and decisions of people in positions of authority? ...</p>

<p>Since the dawn of humans' existence, there have been a myriad count of occurrences in which pillars of arbitrary regulations have been torn down to lead to a decent society in which we inhabit today. Although seen as insubordinate behavior in time of distress, such insubordinate behavior is the mechanism of building onto more justified authority. therefore, it is necessary, and rarely is rebelling unjustified, for people to maintain rational skepticism and question the ideas and decisions of the higher-tier and decision-making of those in such power.</p>

<p>Not even two centuries ago in America's yesteryear, America was conceived a country ran by slavery. It took the questioning of abolitionists such as William Lloyd Garrison, civil rights activists such as Dr. King, and the rationale of the American people to bring slavery to an end and, though not achieved fully yet, discrimination to an end. Had the American people pigeonhole their conscience and not question slavery's, and later inequality's, existence, our society today would never find such advancement-such revolution-due to people of color.</p>

<p>Today, however, a communist regime functions in a way that suppresses such questioning. With this suppression of human ingenuity-of human common sense-communist countries today, such as China, waste talent. Not only do they withhold overachievement but they also fail to meet the basic needs of people-the civil rights of people. My parents, through a course of fortunate events, fled to America and are now able to express their ideals freely and flourish in a bountiful system that has freedom of questioning authority inscribed in its constitution. Communism stands exemplary in how its method of allowing esoteric higher-powers to run its country without allowing its citizens to question decisions and ideas; the citizens are put into perpetual pupilage. Communist leaders stand tall-suspending habeus corpus.</p>

<p>Questioning the ideas of authority and decisions of said authority is important. Authority is instituted to protect civil rights, but people should remain vigilant to ensure such is done.</p>

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<p>Does anybody know if mechanical pencils are allowed on the essay section?</p>

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<p>You will benefit a lot from simplifying your writing</p>

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<p>@CHD2013‌ Argh, sorry… Is it bad I’m in the “AP Lang Mood” right now? How much would it hurt me?</p>

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<p>@Newdle‌ Well generally mechanical pencils aren’t allowed on the SAT, so I imagine the policy wouldn’t allow you to just take out a mechanical pencil on an essay portion suddenly.</p>

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<p>@shawnspencer‌ Alright, thanks for the reply. I heard it’s allowed for the ACT though?</p>

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<p>^^^I think answering the questions more in depth, which you could do if you were less focused on “SAT Words”, could easily give you another 3 points on a 12 point scale.</p>

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<p>Just a tip: The people who are reading these essays skim through in less than 3 minutes. You have to be as explicit as possible in your writing and using SAT words won’t help. Don’t let jargon take over your essay. Just make sure your have compelling and persuasive arguments and you won’t need to use the language you are using. </p>

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<p>Thanks. So… Pretty much spell out everything in my argument with casual language? Should I really focus on 2 or 3 examples or talk about a lot of them?</p>