Opinions please!!

[Kat1applicant]

<p>I haven't showed this to anyone I know yet because I am afraid it is too typical, lackluster, and unfocused. Would love views.
Ask me to PM it to you.
Thanks and will critique back if asked:)</p>

[harvard5]

<p>Pm and i’ll read it</p>

[Kat1applicant]

<p>anyone interested-I will read back…</p>

[retrorocket]

<p>I can read it if you’d like.</p>

[Kat1applicant]

<p><strong><em>bump</em></strong></p>

[carbon]

<p>Sure, PM me if you want.</p>

[kevin12]

<p>Ill help you out. PM me</p>

[Kat1applicant]

<p><strong><em>bump</em></strong></p>

[Hogwartsbound]

<p>Pm me, I’ll read it.</p>