Out-of-the box essay?

College Essays
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<p>I wrote a ROUGH draft of my common app essay answering prompt one (Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.)</p>

<p>I would like some feedback on it because I feel like it's a little sticky in terms of the main idea and transitions. It's supposed to be more of a holistic symbol. I would also like to know if the topic is that different? I wonder how many other students have thought/are doing my topic. Oh, and I would prefer if the readers were college students, thanks!!</p>

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<p>OK, you intrigued me, if a parent of grad student is acceptable to you.</p>

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<p>@BrownParent of course! I should have said in the post AT LEAST college students; parents or grad students are perfectly acceptable! I just want to make sure no students will get a hold of my work, I’m very protective haha.</p>

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<p>I’ll help. PM it</p>

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<p>id love to! PM it (:</p>

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<p>If you are willing to ignore the fact that I am a rising senior in high school, I’d be willing to read it:) Otherwise, I definitely understand.</p>

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<p>@jmoney22 I would PM you it, but I decided to give the essay a complete re-do. I’ll be sure to post the newer version on here for edits again :)</p>