<p>This is a rough draft of my Penn State Essay. Can you please edit it for me. </p>
<pre><code>I walked towards the gym door where a group of girls were already standing looking at the paper that the tennis coach had put up on the door. My hands getting sweaty, my cheeks turning red and my steps where getting slower and shorter as I made my way up to the door. As I was approaching the door, I kept saying the number fourteen in my head. I looked up at the paper and went down the row to see if my number was on the paper. And then my finger suddenly stopped and I was looking at the number fourteen with my eyes widened. I doubted myself thinking if fourteen was the number that had been given to me by my coach. Suddenly the senior captain of the tennis team tapped my shoulder and congratulated me for making the team! I just couldnt believe I had made it; I guess waking up early everyday of that summer and practicing with my dad for 2 hours in the morning and then again in the evening had paid off. I was now part of the JFK Memorial High School Girls Tennis Team.
My dedication and hard work did not just end there. Not only had I made the tennis team my freshmen year; I had proved myself by being the only freshmen earning a position as the 7th rank on the varsity team. I also received the best sportsmanship award that year. However my tennis career didnt just end there; by dedicating myself to the sport and practicing even when the season was over, my sophomore year I raised my rank to number five and then two my junior year along with being co-captain of the varsity team. And now, my senior year, I really proved my self by becoming the captain of the varsity team, winning division title, having an individual record of 16-0, and becoming athlete of the month.
I had started off my tennis career as an amateur to the sport of tennis. However, with my devotedness and commitment to the sport I achieved the highest position I could have imagined by my senior year. Commitment, Dedication, Devotion, and the ability to never give up are qualities that personify me. I live life breathing the smell of constraints and tasting the sweat of willpower. I believe that no matter how tough the situation may be or how frustrated I may get, I will be able to overcome anything that comes in my way to be successful. I believe that my full dedication to everything and anything I do will allow me to make my own imprint in Penn State and allow me to succeed in becoming one of the brightest students in Penn State.
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