<p>I am on the verge of sending in my Penn State application and I am giving the online community here a chance to critique my personal statement and help me improve anything that needs changes. Thanks in advance!</p>
<p>"I frequently find myself pondering about life as we know it, and the universe around us. I like to think about the infinite possibilities and the limitless knowledge available to be explored that frankly, we know so little about.
I believe that when one puts their mind to a task anything can happen. That is what I want my college experience to be about. I want to move mountains to places that Ive never thought possible and I want to leave a positive impression for the world to remember me by. I do not want to stop at college either; I plan on moving on to graduate school to become a master in my field. Being involved at my university is important to me and emerging as a leader in the community is one of my first goals at Penn State University. In the process I hope to meet a diverse and interesting group of people and learn under a professional mentor that can help me excel in what I am passionate about."</p>