Personal Statement, Any readers?

<p>would someone be willing to critique my essay?, I am applying to some Cal States and a couple of private colleges. Any help will be appreciated, please let me know if you are interested in reading my essay.</p>

<p>Thanks in advance.</p>

<p>yea pm it to me ill give u my opinon</p>

<p>pm it to me too, I'll read it</p>

<p>ill read it pm me</p>

<p>pm me........</p>

<p>i just send my own to UCAS...
I will be glad to read yours..</p>

<p>send it - i'll be glad to critique</p>