Personal Statement Question

Applying to College
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<p>So, the first prompt for the UC personal statement is as follows: "Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations."</p>

<p>For this, I really want to write about my best friend's anorexia, and how it has shaped my world. It's shaped my world, because it led me to have a passion for researching psychological and neurological diseases, and has inspired me to want to become a neurological psychologist, and specifically study eating disorders. I plan on writing a lot about her story, and how it has affected me along the way, what I have done because of it, and how it helped me grow.</p>

<p>Do you think this is a good approach to take? Or should I make it more PERSONAL? What should I add to develop this idea?</p>

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<p>I think this is fine. All essays should essential be a story…setting, conflict, resolution. </p>

<p>Describe your friend in vivid terms, she is a character in your story. The conflict isn’t so much her anorexia, though, as it is your own inspiration. I wouldnt add the dtails of what specific field of study you are pursuing, just how her condition motivated you to want to use your skills to help others. GL.</p>