hello. everyone!
here, i have finally finished my personal statement. Can you read it and then criticize. What points seem vague to you? What can I improve? Do you find any weird/incorrect grammatical structures or misuse of words? (btw, I am an international student). Thanks!!!
Sometimes, life hardly makes sense to me. Sometimes, I feel lost. Sometimes, I fail to find solutions to my problems. Sometimes, my questions are left unanswered. Sometimes, I desperately pretend not to care. Sometimes, I even hide my real feelings. Sometimes, I let my spirit be broken. Sometimes, I am weak. Sometimes, I stop dreaming. Sometimes, I doubt. Sometimes, I lose my faith. Sometimes, I simply want to run away and stop asking why. Sometimes things just seem to fall apart when you least expect them to, says the lyrics of one of the rock songs I used to like as a young teenager.
Sometimes, I need to stop calling the word sometimes to my mind. Instead, I should focus on the time either before or after that sometimes. I should make sure that there are no many other times in my life when I feel again like sometimes.
No matter how hard I try to keep my thoughts clean from these sometimes memories, there is one particular event that always brings them back to my mind. The divorce of my parents a couple of years ago was what caused this dark sometimes to appear in my life and to haunt me even today. This event touched the most inner part of my personality and took away all my pure ideals and bright visions that lied hidden there. All that remains in their place today is the memory of this cold and bleak sometimes.
Luckily, I at least know that life is not always sometimes. I have learnt to value all these moments that are outside the sometimes range. I have come to realize how rewarding it is to rejoice in the small and seemingly insignificant things. Only after I had tasted from the bitterness of that sometimes, I was able to discover in myself strong passions aroused by such small details I would probably never find otherwise.
For instance, my love for jazz music was a result of the great joy that suddenly erupted within me once I was able to see and appreciate all the unique bits of beauty expressed by this music. It is clearly the combination of the many magical sounds emanating from jazz that frees my mind and helps me escape from the haunting memories of sometimes. Going out in nature is another source of freedom for my imagination. I easily get enchanted by the unique shapes of leaves, the sweet whisper of the wind, and the playful ripples that form on the surface of a pretty lake. Every time when I look around, I find out with astonishment how a tiny element of nature has the enormous power to reveal the magnificence of life to me. There is no longer place for sometimes. In fact, there is only a feeling of completeness. I dream. I am strong. I believe. I find answers. I care. Things just make sense to me again.
Life seems to be a sinuous curve with many ups and downs. If the downs were not there, there would be no ups. If I did not go through the sometimes experience, I would probably never perceive life the way I do now. I would most likely never find any value in the small things I appreciate now. I would never know my true vocation. I would simply be a different person.
Change we must to live again,
Jon Anderson----