Please critique my rough draft - I will comment back!

College Essays
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<p>Hi,</p>

<p>I recently competed my rough draft (not very smooth at all) of my college essay. It's supposed to be the common app essay, under the "Other" section. Please post here if you would like to read and offer feedback, and I will PM you it.
Also, if you read/comment on my essay, I will read/comment on yours if you have one:)</p>

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<p>PM me with a list of schools you are applying to as well as your prompt! Thanks!</p>

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<p>bump…could use more replies</p>

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<p>PM it with prompt!
I can help edit it! :D</p>

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<p>PM it over and I’ll give feedback :)</p>