Please critique my "Why ND?"!

<p>I'll PM willing readers. Help is greatly appreciated, ND is my dream school!</p>

<p>PM me and I’ll read it. I’m a current student.</p>

<p>Since I’ve now received multiple offers to read my essay, I’ll “close” the window of opportunity, so to speak. I have to wrap things up soon!</p>

<p>Good luck!</p>