Please critique/proofread my essay :)

<p>Hi I just finished and checked my own essay. I need another perspective on it.</p>

<p>The topic is...Select an experience or event that has challenged you this past year and describe its impact on you. (500)</p>

<p>I am not a great essay writer so I would like some help..thank you</p>

<p>u can send it to me. i’ll look at it after i submit mine.</p>

<p>I will take a look at it.</p>