Please critique this essay, I just need one person

<p>I've asked a few people to critique my essay and one of them merely sent theirs in return, which I happily edited for them, but didn't do mine in return. The other has told me they will do it tomorrow, and the third.. I'm not so sure about. Does anyone have time to read & critique mine right now? I've read & critiqued two tonight in a matter of 10 mins each; they're not hard to read and comment on if they're near-final drafts like mine is. Please and thank-you, I would appreciate it!</p>

<p>If you want you can PM me</p>

<p>I’d be happy to help(:</p>