<p>"Finally, your vocabulary. Too many “weird” words from mythology. Too few competent words from English. -1. "</p>
<p>Which weird words from mythology have I used? And few competent words?! I’ve used the best words in context, following KISS (look it up on google) simplicity is the key.</p>
<p>Unconvincing example? Again, I doubt it.</p>
<p>And, I’ve given a conclusion, the main point of the essay was to show whether deception is ever justified, and I showed a case where it is. (I’ve seen such essays in CollegeBoard’s SAT guide WITH a single example as the main thesis)</p>