<p>I think you have a good, detailed example. However, you failed to analyze it clearly. Reading your essay gives me the feeling of reading the summary of a story. Also, your introduction looked weak to me.
I would score this essay 8..9</p>
<p>I think you have a good, detailed example. However, you failed to analyze it clearly. Reading your essay gives me the feeling of reading the summary of a story. Also, your introduction looked weak to me.
I would score this essay 8..9</p>