PLEASE GRADE MY 2nd SAT ESSAY, 1 WEEK LEFT PLEASEE!

<p>Topic: Should people take the responsibility to solve problems that affect their communities or nation?</p>

<pre><code>Ever since the dawn of time, man has become less and less self reliant. The invention of technology and the creation of government has undermined our independence and self sufficiency. It is crucial that people take the responsibility to solve problems that affect their communities or nation. Throughout society, literature, and films, the evidence to support my viewpoint is pervasive.
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<p>Through the actions of Kevin Boateng, poor families in southern Lousiana are receiving gifts for the holidays and the necessities of food such as food and drinkable water. During the famed press conference, Kevin Boateng told his motives for creating the LEHA (Lets feed and help America). He proudly stated "One day I was walking through walmart and an austere and astute boy asked his mother to buy him a snickers bar, a mere snickers bar. His mom sadly told him that they did not have enough money to afford it. Then the poor boy began to cry. This incident propelled me to create the LEHA because I realized the hardships in life and the little effort outside forces are doing to help families like these" As of 2010, the LFHA has raised over $450,000 through fundraisers, donations, and community festivals, to donate to impoverished families. Hence, Kevin Boateng's action of taking the responsibility to help destitute families in his community has enlightened the lives of many families and individuals.</p>

<p>In the famed play Oedipus Rex, Oedipus took it upon himself to rid the City of Corinth from thieves. In Corinth the theft rate was at an enormous 45%, a dazzling number. Unfortunately, the King of Corinth, King Lalibea, was not an advocate of arresting the robberies; infact, nobody really cared until they were robbed and many of the robbed did not stand up and do anything. When Oedipus was robbed, he decided it was time to take action, to make a difference. In his plot, he set up many sly and deceiving traps. The robbers literally walked into the traps because they had not faced any opposition in years. Every night he would behead every man he found caught in his traps. The people of Corinth were joyous and gay. The news spread to King Lalibea and he immedietly took note of Oedipus' action. As a result, Oedipus was appointed Head of the Chamber of Defense of Corinth. As one can clearly see, Oedipus' action of reducing the theft rate has made Corinth a peaceful and idyllic city.</p>

<p>In the blockbuster film Equilibrium by Roy Hendriksory, the State of Isabell was in frantic disarray. There were no laws prohibiting any act. There was no government, just a hereditary king that truly had no power. There were robberies, assassinations, mockery, heresy and not one man decided to do anything about it; even the king refused to help in fear of being assassinated. One dutch-man Nigel de Jong decided the time to wait was over and the time to act has come. He immediately pursued action. He set up committees, or miniature governments, throughout the land to govern a small section. Over time this grew into a large feudal system that had law and order. The citizens now lived in bliss and were fearless of crime because it was very rare because Nigel De Jong decided to take the responsibility to solve a major problem or crisis in his nation.</p>

<p>After a careful analysis of Kevin Boateng, Oedipus Rex, and Nigel de Jong, one can see that it is indeed crucial for people to take responsibility for solving problems that affect their communities and their nation. The world might not be where it is today if people like Kevin Boateng or Nigel de Jong did not take responsibility for solving problems and become mavericks of their time.</p>

<p>Can anyone please grade this!!!</p>

<p>Please help. Constuctive criticism neeeded!</p>

<p>12
lol i swear you ********ted
but very good structure, (created by this guy at cc yeah?)
good choice of vocab
obscure names for better fabrication
good linking of examples to topic
thats all you need reli lmao
good job (Y)</p>

<p>Really?? Are you kidding me?</p>

<p>Lmao Kevin Prince Boateng and Nigel de Jong, you could make your examples a little less obvious if you atleast mixed and matched names instead of using them directly as they really are. How about Nigel Boateng… :o</p>

<p>im confused, are these just practice essays written in preparation for next weeks test?</p>

<p>Im writing essays on practice test prompts, can you grade mine please</p>

<p>12, good examples, very detailed, connected it back to the question. Just not sure if it would fit</p>

<p>it fits, i wrote it on the paper then transefered it onto here</p>