Please grade my essay =D

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<p>It would mean so much to be if anyone could please look at my essay. I know it can be tedious and annoying but this would help me a lot -- the essay has always been my weakest point. So here we go. </p>

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<p>Prompt: Should a college education focus on cultivating and encouraging the imagination of students or on teaching basic facts and standards so that we all share a certain amount of common knowledge? </p>

<p>Essay:</p>

<p>The purpose of education is that students learn about and learn from the past, and use what they’ve learned to improve upon life and the world we live in. This purpose would not be fulfilled if the education system doe not spark imagination. After all, learning can only get us so far, it’s using hat we’ve learned that truly impacts.</p>

<p>Thomas Edison invented as many as 2000 marvels that still amaze us today. From light bulbs to telephones, he was a man who changed the quality of our lives forever. Certainly he had gone to school and learned about chemistry and physics, but knowing the material very well was not enough for inventing what no one ever even thought about. While being knowledgeable about the sciences, the other key ingredients to his many successes were imagination and creativity. Without these, Edison could have understood everything about Coulomb’s Law and still not be able to “connect the wires” and lighten up the world.</p>

<p>It would be difficult to prove that the school Edison attended put more emphasis on imagination, but the moral remains the same. An education system, the college education being the most prestigious and impactful, should inspire imagination in addition to promote learning. In such a way, the world would continue to move forward. </p>

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<p>Please be brutally honest. I know there are lots of punctuation errors and I know "impactful" wasn't a word, but I couldn't think of a substitute. Please also comment on the length and the example used, and whether I should include more examples. Or anything else that I should change. And I had no idea how many things Thomas Edition invented, whether he invented the telephone, or if he's ever the person I meant to talk about.</p>

<p>Thanks!! =D</p>

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<p>anyone? please?</p>

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<p>Bit on the short side, I'd say 6-7, maybe 8.</p>

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<p>hmm...i would give it a 4...try making it more elaborate and detailed... keep working at it and good luck!</p>

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<p>I haven't read it; it's a 5~6/12 essay. The main thing that matters on SAT essay is length. Screw the content. :D</p>

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<p>thankss everyone~~
i usually write over 2 pages but for this particularly prompt i really couldn't think of another example. and using personal example seemed lame. </p>

<p>anyone else? more feedback would be greatly appreciated.</p>

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<p>6-8, you should make it longer and try to use a higher level of diction :)</p>

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<p>seriously it's tooo short. you should also address the second part of the question more clearly. and like everyone else has said, more examples. the diction doesn't count much for your score. fairly sophisticated would be fine; there is no need to sound overly academic. i think your style and all that is okay. but do add in some nice phrases here and there if you could. however i must emphasise your standard is fine. do save some time to edit your essay at the end. </p>

<p>i'll give it a 7/8. but i am horrible at grading, so just take my comments, haha.</p>

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<p>i'd say content-wise it's very short.....nice example.
7/12 at most, largely due to short length,,add a couple of more examples...you'll be in the double figures</p>

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<p>thanks everyone!!</p>