Please Grade my Essay! SAT Due in 10 days!

<p>Here is what i've written. I would appreciate if you criticize it!</p>

<p>A better understanding of other people contributes to the development of moral virtues. We shall be both kinder and fairer in our treatment of others if we understand them better. Understanding ourselves and understanding others are connected, since as human beings we all have things in common.
Adapted from Anne Sheppard. Aesthetics: An Introduction ro rhe Philosophy. Assignment: Do we need other people in order to understand ourselves? Plan and write m essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>We need others’ help to understand ourselves. Man is a social animal, as the much worn-out cliché goes. An introvert can never understand himself as much as an extrovert understands himself, because the fact is that no matter how much he ponders over himself, he cannot compare himself to others, and hence leads a life of confusion. A gregarious person on the other hand knows people to with and relate to. All an introvert ever can achieve on his road to knowing himself is confusing speculation, which he can never put to test.</p>

<p>A very prominent example of this situation occurs in Mark Twain’s much acclaimed novel, ‘A Connecticut Yankee in King Arthur’s Court’. The protagonist spends a great deal of time writing about how he dreaded the lordship of the Middle Ages for their abusive and obscene language. It was only after he was subjected to the torture of his friend’s constant droning and uninteresting never-ending speech that he found himself abusing his friend, thus realizing his true self. Only after his perseverance was put to test by other people was he able to understand his actual behavior.</p>

<p>In our daily lives, we are also prone to not fully understanding ourselves. This is why we have psychologists, who help us in identifying what bothers us, or what we lack. Without the help of expert psychologists, we would be left wondering what is wrong with us. This might result in dire consequences, like frustration and loss of self-esteem. However, after psychologists have helped us identify our problems, we can work positively towards overcoming these problems.</p>

<p>Although one might argue that the only authority on understanding a certain person is the person himself, but it stands to reason that man does not live alone in this world. External factors affect him, which is why he needs external help to understand himself.</p>

<p>I think it's pretty good. I'd give it a 10-11. :)</p>

<p>id give it a 9-10</p>

<p>i give a 9 because this essay says too much ;moreover; it has just an example. THough the essay is quite flowery, i find it not academic and convincing enough.</p>

<p>Thanks! I am sure this advice will certainly help me! More criticism is certainly welcome!</p>

<p>To bump or not to bump...?</p>

<p>this one is much much better than the other one...
this is a straight 10...ways to improve:
a) use another bloody example!......your third paragraph should be replaced by an example (personal or otherwise)
b)as said before, make a really strong ending, the reader's gonna remember what you wrote at the end, hence give him something to chew on!
another example will make it an 11 or 12 essay....i see a high essay score for you, my friend!:D</p>

<p>this is collegeboard analysis....maybe I should hire you to check my essays everyday :D</p>