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<p>Can success be diastrous</p>

<pre><code>"Hey, after I have practiced for three years, I can cast thunder bolt spell now"
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<p>a young wizard Xabi told his friend Amal. "Revenge anyone who belittle us" Amal said.
One week later, a quarter of their neighbors were killed by Xabi. Success can be diastrous.
The examples which support my point are the successes of Naki in Gantz, of King Rowen in Double Eagles and of Xi Xiang in Go Goal.</p>

<pre><code>In 2002, a Japanese comic book Gantz was published. Gantz is about a world after death which people who died in accidents have to do missions for their reincarnations. In alien-killing msiion, Naki, a leader of Gantz team, killed a captain of alien. All members in the team were very happy. However, alien's captain's death was not the real objective of this mission. They had to alive for 30 minutes after the death of captain. No one survived, because the troops of alien were really angry and used the most deleterious weapon in the humankind history. Naki's success for killing alien's head which lead to the death of all team members indicates that success can be noxious.
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<p>Like a Japanese comic book Gantz, an English novel Double Eagles affirms my opinion. King Rowen is the king of Black Kingdom. He wanted the princess of White Kingdom to be his wife. So, he declared a war with White Kingdom. In the end, Rowen got the princess, but half of Black Kingdom's soldiers were died. Success of Rowen comes from the death of his people. Rowen's success is a great example that success can be harmful.</p>

<p>The evidences that success can be dangerous are not only display in books, but also in a Chinese movie Go Goal. Xi Xiang wanted to be a star singer. She practiced hardly to get better voice. Finally, she reached her dream. However, she had no friend. Xi Xiang was so lonely. In the end, Xi Xiang broke the habit: suicide. Although Xi Xiang had been succeed, she finally suicided. This story verifies that success can lead to griefs.</p>

<p>The examples of Naki's success in Gantz, Rowen's in Double Eagles and Xi Xiang's in Go Goal prove that success can be diastrous.</p>

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