Please grade my essay

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<p>What is your opinion of the claim that truth is not objective but determined by the individual?</p>

<p>Truth is not concrete in many instances, it is not something that can always be concluded. One person's truth is another's illusion merely because of interpretation and the background of the individual. In Life of Pi, a book turned movie, a young man tells a tale of a sea voyage gone wrong. A story which he believes to be the truth, however the medical personnel whom he tells it to believe he is insane and unable to see his ridiculousness. The story is of him and his family riding across the ocean when all of a sudden a great big storm begins to arise among the ominous waves. The boy is awoken from his sleep to find water bursting into his cabinet below the deck. He struggles to make it back to the deck of the ship but when he does he sees wild animals, which were being transported aboard the ship, that were floating around in the water above the deck. In hysteria he grabs a safety raft, once he realizes the futility of trying to rescue his family, and jumps into the ocean. As he is out at sea he, after a few days of being aboard the raft, notices something under a blanketed off area of the ship, a tiger and a hyena as well as a monkey which has been next to him the whole time. Months pass and with time he befriends the tiger but in a dramatic turn of events the hyena kills the monkey and the tiger kills the hyena. When they finally arrive at sea the tiger leaves him despite their newly acquired bond. Disheartened and exhausted the boy passes out on the shore. The boy is then awoken into a room with medics who begin to ask him questions. The medics ask him about what happened, who it happened with, and so the boy told them. To their disbelief they questioned him and refused to give in to his story. In order to rid himself of their interrogation and annoyance he devises a story where the monkey was actually his mother, the hyena was actually a chef, and he was the tiger and re-told it so that the chef killed his mom and he in turn killed the chef. This was sufficient enough for the medics and they disregarded further questioning, however the boy did believe his story but to those medics such oddity, such a tale seemed too good to be true. In their ill judgement and inability to believe the medics were deprived of the truth. I believe truth is based on morals and past beliefs, unique ideas are hard to embrace but even harder to be content with.</p>

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<p>i can’t see this getting above a 3.
nearly all of your writing was summarizing 1 example. youre going to need to change the way you approach the sat essay. try looking at an online guide here 1st then work on fine tuning your sat writing.</p>

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<p>Okay, i’ll check that out, i’m not sure if you mean 3/12 or 3/6 i’m at least hoping the latter otherwise that would be extremely disheartening.</p>

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<p>3/6 </p>

<p>1)Develops a point of view on the issue, demonstrating some critical thinking, but may do so inconsistently or use inadequate examples, reasons or other evidence to support its position
2)Is limited in its organization or focus, or may demonstrate some lapses in coherence or progression of ideas</p>

<p>Are the main reasons I gave you a 3 at most. You get way off focus (when you just start summarizing). Also, you use inadequate examples/reasons to support your position (only using 1 half lucid example).</p>

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<li><p>You have grammar problems, especially comma splices. Find a tutor. Period.</p></li>
<li><p>Your whole plan is off. You want to write about truth, but you’ll use some sort of new age fact-fiction-hippie story as evidence. That doesn’t work. Writing about something you really know about would work a lot better.</p></li>
<li><p>Your essay needs to make a series of points, and they need to be YOUR points. When you summarize a source, it should be because the source ILLUSTRATES what YOU have to say. Here, you summarize so much, it comes off like you have nothing to say. Your message is this: “I really don’t get it it. Let me tell you about a book that seems to get it.” Stop thinking about this as some sort of school exercise. Have something of your own to say.</p></li>
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<p>Yeah, I see what you mean. I just noticed all the unnecessary commas. I think that’s because I wrote it when I was really tired, but i’ll be sure to watch out for it. Thanks for the feedback. I’ll try to include more of a perspective in the future.</p>

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<p>Yes. That’s exactly what I meant. Take out the commas. O.o</p>