PLEASE grade my essay.

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<p>Prompt: Do we need other people in order to understand ourselves?</p>

<p>We humans are extremely complex animals. We are, debatably, the animal with the most intricacies in our personal and social life. One of the factors that contributes to us being so complex is that we have a one-dimensional perspective. And from that one-dimensional perspective, not much about our own personal self can be understood. This is why we need other people. </p>

<p>When I was a lot younger, my mother always told me that she saw bits and pieces of herself in me. She always told me that I had her personality, her keep sense of judgement, her sense of humor, and her sarcasm. Me, being naive as a little kid is, always thought those remarks peculiar. "Why is it even relevant that I have her personality" I would think to myself. Here's why: she didn't understand the nuances of personality until she saw them in mine.</p>

<p>This idea of needing someone as a manual of what you're made of extends far beyond behind the doors of my home. A study performed in 2003 by psychologist Dr. Michael P. Sector proved that people only see in others what they have in themselves. He asked 25 people, ages 16-30, to make a personality chart based on their favorite social figure. The personality chart made by the subjects matched that of their own almost to a T. </p>

<p>In conclusion, we need others to better understand ourselves. We need their personality to dissect ours, and we need their presence to validate ours. The experience of human understanding is best seen with eyes other than one's own.</p>

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<p>Try to not start sentence w/ conjunction
Try to enhance your essay with other things beside study. Once you take the SAT, you probably not gonna be able to list any study unless you remember the whole Psych textbook.</p>

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<p>what do you mean? my example wasn’t good?</p>

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<p>It’s kind of short. Did you use the full 25 minutes to write this?</p>

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<p>yes! i took up all the pages there are on the practice test book. But any other critique other than length?</p>

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<p>This is probably too short to earn higher than a three, especially because you say a couple things more than once. (In other words, this isn’t even as long as it appears to be.)</p>

<p>In your conclusion, you mention these ideas:</p>

<p>—We need their personality to dissect ours</p>

<p>—we need their presence to validate ours. </p>

<p>—the experience of human understanding is best seen with eyes other than one’s own.</p>

<p>These are interesting—I wish you’d discussed them in more depth.</p>

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<p>Length sounds like a petty thing to critique, but being short means you have very little of substance there. Which will net you a low score.</p>

<p>You must write big or something…</p>