Please, Grade my Essay

<p>Do things that make our lives easier necessarily make it better??
Blue Book #2</p>

<p>Things that make our lives easier certainly make it better. New innovations save us a lot of time and money and makes living much more easier. New advances in the field of science and technology make our life much easier if we use them correctly.</p>

<pre><code>Even today, people in some rural areas of Nepal don't have access to electricity. This causes a lot of problems. But the main problem is preparation of meals as firewood is used to cook meals. Women, who generally cook the meals, have to search for wood daily. They begin searching for wood as early as noon, search for 2-3 hours and start preparing dinner. Dinner is generally served before dark or in candle lights. Wouldn't the lives of those women be easier if their village had electricity or even gas stoves? The method of cooking is not only taking a lot of the women's time, it is also causing the degradation of valuable forest resources.

A modern phenomenon whose proliferation has taken the world by storm is the internet. Internet is a versatile mode of communication. One minute you are talking with your relative in Africa and the next you are posting an advertisement on EBay for your old car. A click of a button can help us find about things we were ignorant about or were too lazy to look up in the encyclopedia. But the internet can be harmful if misused. Using the internet too much can cause internet addiction and lead to things like depression and anti-social behavior.

So, we can say that things that make our lives easier will definitely make it better if it is used properly. Improper use can turn even the greatest blessing of our times, the internet, to a curse.
</code></pre>

<p>Could you please give me some suggestions about the starting and the ending of the essay. My intro and summary always sucks.</p>

<p>Thanks</p>

<p>C'mon. People Help me.</p>

<p>Maybe a 5 or something. The vocabulary is strong...maybe a stronger intro and conclusion and a third example will get you a 6. Don't base your grade on what I say though. I'm not very good at this.</p>

<p>Thanks man , but the main problem is time. If I write a third example there will be no time for editing and then I'll end up with lots of errors.
Thanks again man.</p>

<p>Others also please grade my essay..!!!!!!!!!</p>

<p>bump....Please anyone else..Pleeeeeeeeeassssssssssssseeeeee</p>

<p>state your examples in the intro (three of them) and then write one paragraph per example so you'll have space to thouroughly explain yourself. So with the intro and conclusion, it should be five paragraphs: a perfect essay.</p>

<p>Thank you Minor6th.</p>

<p>Of course! :) Usually the essay prompt asks you to take a position and support it. The more examples you have, the stronger your claim is and the more likely you'll get a perfect score on the essay. </p>

<p>In the intro, write your version of the prompt before they accuse you of plagiarism or whatever these crazy people do these days. State if you agree or disagree with it followed by your three examples. </p>

<p>Try to use different types of examples. One from literature (use a book to support your claim), one from history, and one from your personal experience. </p>

<p>In your conclusion, restate the prompt, whether you agree or disagree, and one sentence for each example. That's all! Not too much to worry about. </p>

<p>Now if you're taking AP English with three essays in 2 hours and 15 min, then you're screwed, but that's another story.</p>